narcissism

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sweetwater
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Post by sweetwater » September 8th, 2008, 1:29 pm

you're all pure geniuses of narciss
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Post by constantine » September 8th, 2008, 2:56 pm

almost lyrical - on par with your classic sudep
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Post by stilltrucking » September 15th, 2008, 1:21 am

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Post by hester_prynne » September 16th, 2008, 1:13 am

"you're all pure geniuses of narciss"

I'd change the you're to you are...I think that flows better.
Aside from that, this is very clever I must say..this one liner poem. I can just see narcissus saying this outloud, as he looks at his own reflection.....
Well done.

H 8)
"I am a victim of society, and, an entertainer"........DW
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