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GRAIL, or Grayle, The Holy ....

Post by mindbum » July 11th, 2008, 12:50 pm

GRAIL, or Grayle, The Holy (Saint Graal, Seynt Greal, Sangreal, Sank Ryal.) The correct spelling is "Graal." -- Encyclopaedia Britannica, Ninth Edition, ca. 1880


while searching for
whilst questing
amid looking

for this vessel
or shallow bowl
this dish
or cup

looking for the muchlookedfor
the highly sought

art-i-fact

greatly desired bloodbowl
a lamb's tiny bloodbath

the metropolis of wanting
megalopolis of desire

wonderworking vessel of legendary desire

the way of the chosen
chosen by oracular legend
sustenance of searching
subsequent searching

whilst looking for the looking for the looking for the looking

desirous of desire of desirousness
locked in a cult of desire

while searching for
direction

this quest
for this

object

came along
with an offer
of a quest with no end in sight

an occupation of preoccupation with desire
swilled from an ambiguous vessel
trilled to a darkening sky
godless & songless, western man dances with the stuffed gorilla through all the blind alleys of a dead-end world.

-maxwell bodenheim

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Post by stilltrucking » July 11th, 2008, 1:02 pm

of a quest with no end in sight

an occupation of preoccupation with desire
swilled from an ambiguous vessel
trilled to a darkening sky
Talk about job security


I have a compelling desire to read this poem of yours again and again
8)

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Post by mindbum » July 11th, 2008, 1:15 pm

hahaha.

a career of never enough.

like when i cry out at the end of a bottle of beer b.c there's never enough in there.

thanks for reading kindsir.
godless & songless, western man dances with the stuffed gorilla through all the blind alleys of a dead-end world.

-maxwell bodenheim

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Post by constantine » July 11th, 2008, 2:10 pm

the wordplay is smooth - almost hypnotic.

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Post by Lightning Rod » July 11th, 2008, 2:25 pm

bum,
the grail is always a strong image
you can turn it in every direction because everybody in Christendom knows the story.

(but 'whilst'? what century are you writing in?)
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Post by emel.scott » July 11th, 2008, 3:45 pm

I spell it to San Gria and drink it from a plastic cup till I forget the quest

Enjoyed this
We should not mind if on our ear there fell. Some less of cunning, more of oracle...Thoreau

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Post by hester_prynne » July 11th, 2008, 5:16 pm

Yowsa,
Indeed this sends me.....

H 8)
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Post by mnaz » July 12th, 2008, 3:25 am

I remember the "Zion" obsession from my time in Utah. So I thought, it must be somewhere close, maybe I'll get back on the road and go looking for the looking..

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Post by saw » July 12th, 2008, 11:16 am

the structure of the poem gives clear emphasis and rhythm.....
the wordplay has whimsy, but also meat....enjoyed
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Post by mindbum » July 13th, 2008, 6:12 pm

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godless & songless, western man dances with the stuffed gorilla through all the blind alleys of a dead-end world.

-maxwell bodenheim

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Post by mindbum » July 13th, 2008, 6:21 pm

further:

above is the original of the poem.

thank you constantine. it must be a spell.

LR- thanks for reading. & criticising my use of anachronism. i like the way whilst sounds. do you like the source of inspiration? though, i'll admit i didnt really wanna get into the story. i guess that's superficial. but, i'm writing in the 21st century.

on paper from the 19th century with a 20th century machine.

emel- beer from frosty mug. me own vessel. thanks fer readio.

H- minnie minnie fanks.

mnaz- it's in the gettin there.

saw- thank yooou. spellishness. chantitudity.
godless & songless, western man dances with the stuffed gorilla through all the blind alleys of a dead-end world.

-maxwell bodenheim

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Post by goldenmyst » July 14th, 2008, 9:11 pm

Intricately laid out with urgent power.

John

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Post by mindbum » July 16th, 2008, 1:32 pm

thank you. this one came thru.
godless & songless, western man dances with the stuffed gorilla through all the blind alleys of a dead-end world.

-maxwell bodenheim

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