Another Road song.

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mnaz
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Another Road song.

Post by mnaz » November 3rd, 2008, 6:45 am

If you said I was sick of this place,
I would listen. We would find a road.
We would be our own pain, our own song,
to the rhythm of wipers in a rare desert rain.
If you said I was ready I would listen.

We would find a place,
into the wind, some place different.
We would make a life of it, I'm sure,
dancing to Hank in a rare desert storm.
It is damn quiet except for the wipers.

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Post by saw » November 3rd, 2008, 7:09 am

I've always dug the rhythm of the wipers and well, you can't write a proper road song with out including them...nice work, I like the complex mystery with so few words........
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Post by Perdida » November 3rd, 2008, 3:42 pm

We would be our own pain, our own song,
to the rhythm of wipers in a rare desert rain.
absolutely love this mnaz, displays a vivd image...thanks for sharing.

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Post by judih » November 3rd, 2008, 11:28 pm

true love song, mnaz
good sincere love song

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Post by mtmynd » November 4th, 2008, 1:19 am

Thumbs up on that one!

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Post by hester_prynne » November 4th, 2008, 2:28 am

Gawd! I so love this....
H 8)
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Post by Arcadia » November 4th, 2008, 12:48 pm

sweet, but not too-sweet but not diet!!!!! :lol: (I´m joking, of course!)
beautiful one, mnaz!!!!!! :D

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Post by mnaz » November 4th, 2008, 2:13 pm

Thank you everyone. Inspired by (and borrowed from) a Calexico riff.. wistful Southwestern passage..

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Post by goldenmyst » November 6th, 2008, 6:35 pm

I dig this tremendously. Your desert notes never cease to inspire wonder.

John

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Post by SmileGRL » November 7th, 2008, 2:48 pm

i dig this poem

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