A working man

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Kailashana
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A working man

Post by Kailashana » September 12th, 2011, 2:10 pm

Your beard, rough, against my face
lover's sweat beading upon our bed,
lingering impressions, wheels in motion
calloused hands wrapped around my poem.
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Re: A working man

Post by judih » September 13th, 2011, 11:08 pm

sweet rough embrace piece
lovely, anna
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Re: A working man

Post by dadio » September 14th, 2011, 2:37 am

Well worked poem.
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Re: A working man

Post by mnaz » September 14th, 2011, 4:11 pm

i like how you become the poem . . . effective economy / image . . .
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Re: A working man

Post by Kailashana » September 14th, 2011, 4:20 pm

Thank you. Judith; thank you,Terry; thank you, Mnaz.

(And thank you Barry.)

~A
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