a leaping bound and a venison grin

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saw
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a leaping bound and a venison grin

Post by saw » August 29th, 2016, 8:26 am

I move like a forest ninja
come face to face with a tawny doe
she stiffened like a child playing freeze tag
instinctively I sang to her

'Home Home on the Range"
in my applewood tenor projection
the seductive twist of chords
like a white hot zephyr band

tickling the canopy of green
"Where You and the Antelope Play"
I crooned better than Mr. Crosby
for ten long minutes

we had this thing....mutual trust
her head cocked at times
like the family retriever...then a bolt
out into the meadow to join her friends

I sang Goodbye in my made-up deer voice
I thought I saw her turn her head
hallway through the tall lemon grass
to smile back at me, wow...in mid-stride

a leaping bound and venison grin
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

Grinch
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Re: a leaping bound and a venison grin

Post by Grinch » August 29th, 2016, 9:38 am

Nice poem

I wonder, do forest ninjas wear green?

68degrees
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Re: a leaping bound and a venison grin

Post by 68degrees » August 29th, 2016, 10:32 am

I am picturing this in my mind. I like it.

The reference to Mr. (Bing) Crosby, I like the Mr., is very cool, as is the "playing freeze tag" of the deer in the headlights of your eyes.

68degrees

saw
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Re: a leaping bound and a venison grin

Post by saw » August 30th, 2016, 8:37 am

good thought Grinch ...green is the right color for sure.....or would it be camo...?....hmmm

thanx 68 for specifying what sounded good to you.... 8) 8)
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

leafsailors ghost
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Re: a leaping bound and a venison grin

Post by leafsailors ghost » August 30th, 2016, 1:57 pm

I believe you did !I have talked to an owl with my harmonica . The owl was just a few feet away at dusk , some really neat sounds came back from him . I can see this ,with the deer , happen to you as you write it. I find the critter coming through even though it is in people words.
Animals read minds more openly then we do.The Apache say the animals still talk to one other and to us but we have forgotten how to listen, I have read similar things said by other indigenous folk.
I am curious is this a real story as I suspect? I enjoyed the poem it has a nice open feeling with a quiet underlying amazement .It is always just magic to really make contact. as you say, you know it in the eyes.

saw
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Re: a leaping bound and a venison grin

Post by saw » August 30th, 2016, 10:06 pm

yeah leaf....completely true.....one of the best spontaneous events ever for me....finally I was quick on my feet with a woman.....ha ha 8) 8)
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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