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knowing yourself

Post by saw » December 18th, 2009, 9:53 pm

Patti liked to be in charge
we had the routine all worked out
we'd smoke a joint have two glasses of merlot
she would turn into Nymphozilla

it was downright scary
even for a young buck marking all the trees
with his rock hard antlers
she was inhuman

and when I was with her
I never felt like it mattered whether
she was with me
or the wino who pissed himself in the alley

Patti had a mission
a calling in life that she did not deny
I was still looking for myself
she already knew who she was
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Post by judih » December 19th, 2009, 1:13 am

wow. stark. brilliant.
antlers and wino and self-knowledge.
oh, how this works!
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Post by Barry » December 19th, 2009, 1:59 am

Awesome telling, dude. I remember girls like that. And wondering if I would survive or thrive. And would I be able to tell the difference.

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Post by hester_prynne » December 19th, 2009, 3:45 am

This is top notch.
Really enjoyed..
H 8)
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Post by mtmynd » December 19th, 2009, 9:38 am

strong stuff, steve.

ever wonder if she survived her lifestyle..?
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Post by saw » December 19th, 2009, 12:28 pm

thanx so much judih, barry hester, mtmynd.......and yes, i often wonder what happened to her and other women as well.....
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Post by Arcadia » December 19th, 2009, 1:02 pm

hey! I used to think I knew a lot of guys like that! :roll: :lol: enjoyed the reading, gracias!
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Post by saw » December 21st, 2009, 11:24 am

thanx arcadia.....yes, i'm quite sure this is not a gender specific story
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Post by Doreen Peri » December 21st, 2009, 12:25 pm

What fun! ;)

heh ... I think I knew her. :P

Enjoyed your poem.

Happy Holidays, Steve!
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Post by the mingo » December 21st, 2009, 12:48 pm

*Sparkle on the Monkey Train*

Righteous Hammer !
Righteous Nails !
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.
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Post by Lightning Rod » December 21st, 2009, 7:50 pm

nice sketch, saw
sexual philanthropy is forever intriguing
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Post by saw » December 23rd, 2009, 4:37 am

doreen, mingo, clay...good to hear from you....happy holi-daze !
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