following up on a thought

[joel]

[I'll be trying, csoul...]

“My eyes will fill with awe
when wintry manners thaw
and playgrounds spring
where – graced – I’ll swing
and ride a see-soul-saw.

“I’ll teeter love’s control
on flesh-&-spirit whole
and never set
it still, but let
it shine: Invictus Sol!

“And then will I be me;
and you will make us three
as seamlessly,
poetically,
as frost and fog and sea—

“and, yes, I’ll have a friend
or two in you.” I tend
to pray like this
at times and kiss
good-bye my own lone end.

So, thank you if you hear
me—thanks if you draw near—
and thank you for
sweet troubadours
as playmates, such as we’re.

[Steve Plonk]

Heartwarming poem, Joel! Hope the person that you're addressing, gets the sentiment, and responds in kind.

[Hollweg]

Joel. This is a nice piece, but I am not keen on it ending with a contraction. I think the near-rhyme you would get from "we are" would cover your scheme and read better. Obviously your call.

[saw]

the 3 musketeers of poetry, ha......this is a really good poem, and one would not need any esoteric hints to appreciate this..... stanza 4 is my favorite. if I had to pick...........keep 'em coming....ride the wave, joel