The Book

[the mingo]

you lie in your pond ,love
deep in the woods
reading your book
i sit on your strange shore
making amphibious sounds with my lips
then I close my eyes
you begin to laugh
I say "What?" without opening my eyes
you answer "You should read this book,
there's some really funny shit going on."

[westcoast]

quirky.. i'm with you till the last line were, subjectively speaking of course... ... you loose me with a cheap line.

~westie

[Doreen Peri]

sounds like love to me

you lucky, devil



i liked the poem

very much

[WIREMAN]

i still have not read the book (the fountainhead) that my 2nd wife gave me 30 years ago.....inspired writing i must say mingo...........

[westcoast]

hi mingo,

just want you to know i'm not a beeotch. i really enjoy "The Book"; it is inspired and that is why i was taken by surprise at the final line.

don't get me wrong, i'm a modern woman and artiste...

it is just that i felt the poem was of a higher order than using the word "shit" -- but that is hip linga franca -- so, i beg your forgiveness/understanding if i have offended you as a poet. that was not my intention.

best,
janet

aka - westie

[the mingo]

hey westie...no offense taken...the last line led to the piece actually & I wrote that line exactly as it was spoken to me...I usually don't mess with something that comes up to notice like that...let me ricochet off the wall here & say when you come upon a burning but unconsumed bush the best thing ya can do for yourself & your reader is remove your sandals & just listen...you treated me well by saying what you thought...thats real courtesy & respect in my book any day...

[the mingo]

...and to doreen & wireman thanks for reading - Wireman, thanks for your comment, glad you enjoyed - doreen, yes, sometimes I do end up with the shiny, usually thru no fault of my own - thx again for reading,makes the whole show worthwhile.