Falling

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bethany
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Falling

Post by bethany » June 5th, 2006, 8:16 pm

I've always wondered how you see me,
now i guess I know.
When the wind was going strong
you just let me go

I'm flowing freely in the air,
no strings containing me.
Now I know there's no-one there
no-one to catch me.

The wind suddenly stops
and now I'm falling.

I was falling for you
now I'm falling to my death.
And now I want to say
with my last and final breath.

I want to say 'I love you'
I want to say 'I care'
But if you feel the opposite
That's something I can not bare.

I wanted to say 'I love you',
But you just screamed hate.
And now I can't say anything,
because it's just too late.








and yes.. I re-registered. was: beth_sweety13
It was the dance that lasted a lifetime, but ended in an eye-blink.

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Post by bethany » June 6th, 2006, 11:18 pm

tell me if this makes sense!!!!
It was the dance that lasted a lifetime, but ended in an eye-blink.

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Post by Doreen Peri » June 6th, 2006, 11:46 pm

Bethany.. Yes... this makes so much sense! It's beautiful! I saw it last night and read it aloud to my daughter who is your age and she said, "I LOVE it!".. saw a glimmer of a tear in her eye. She's 13 and has had several boys who she's "gone out" with and I think this poem hit a soft spot in her heart. You are a very talented writer, Bethany, and at such an early age! I am looking forward to reading more of your poetry. Welcome and thank you for sharing your heart with us. :)

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Post by stilltrucking » June 7th, 2006, 10:53 am

I should be the last one to comment on poetry. I know nothing about it, I just love reading it.

Thank you for posting.

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Post by ~K » June 15th, 2006, 4:32 am

It makes the kind of sense that falling makes.

A situation that occurs beyond our control.
What we can control is how we deal with it,
once we've hit the ground.

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Post by Ann Bingham » July 7th, 2006, 11:22 pm

Oh I was so hoping it was you. Yippee. sorry--Blond moment. You are very talented, it is true, and I'm so glad you are back. Keep posting girl; your writing, such depth...ok I'll stop now.


love lots

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Re: Falling

Post by joel » July 12th, 2006, 3:13 pm

bethany wrote:The wind suddenly stops
and now I'm falling.
this is a line; usually it's the falling in love cliche we get hung up on, how refreshing to fall somewhere else.
"Every genuinely religious person is a heretic, and therefore a revolutionary" -- GBShaw

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